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What is this?
My heart is pounding.
You're getting closer. Too close to me.
Please...no... Don't make me feel pain!...ah?
...your hand is warm... is it your hand that is warming so fast my face?
I'm feeling hot...but we're in the fall! What's wrong with my body's temperature?? Does my PAK defective?
...why are you looking me like this?
So grasping... and...so happy?...I don't know... it's too much feelings on your face to analyse one by one...
... I don't like it, I wanna go to my base!...w-what the... Why my legs can't move?
Why am I feeling so weak? Me, the ALMIGHTY ZIM!
Is it the way you're touching my cheek lightly with your thumb?
Why the heck are you touching me like that? Without pain?! Is it for sorry? Is it for fear (certainly is for fear...)

But...strangely...I'm enjoying... Ah, What was I thinking?! NO! I CAN'T LIKE THAT!
...Hey, why are you getting closer? Isn't it enough to you? NO! STOP! I ORDER THAT YOU ST...

...

...

...

...soft...

I don't feel pain...
... what have you done with me? Gh!...My...heart... is beating too fast...
Like yours...yes, I can feel it just touching your chest.

...I want...touch...

NO!I CANNOT SURRENDER!
But you still touch me... Why? Rubbing your hand on my neck...your mouth on my...
I can feel your tongue moving on my lips, like begging to enter... Why do you want so much this? But let's play a little your game...
...Were you wanting so much? It seems that's about to swallow me!
So wet...and dominant... I'll not surrender for...!...mmmmm...P-press harder...
...NO! STOP!...gh...

Your...hug...is so comfortable...

...huh? What is this new feeling?...would that be what they call "affection"?
...no... looks like more than this...

... more...

More...

I want...more...

...n-no...
...I must...resist!
...aaagh!
...

Fuck it, I want you.
yay, my first fic
No, it's not the fic that I wanted someone to be my beta

It's very quickly but it's just a test

Well, enjoy :P
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:iconmariamor126:
mariamor126 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014
jajajajajajaja lo ultimo me mato XD, fue OWESOME!
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LycanDrake2828 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014
Giggle :happybounce: Giggle Love Heart 
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Sea-Frog Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just love it :D
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snowkit96 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
amazing i love it!
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Lu-Lu666 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
this is good
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KittyStar1 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
....................
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Kyodaine Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Artist
xD the last line mades me laugh and bleed and blush and....i don't know xD
"Fuck it, i want you" best line ever ;)
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Nari97 Featured By Owner May 9, 2012
i can only imagine what they're doing *wink wink*
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Kyodaine Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Artist
omg, i know that feeling xDDD
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love15229 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
Awww. I loved the ending. So... heart warming. ;3;
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Singingportrate Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"F*** it i want you" HAHA XD
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TFAMisu Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
love the ending XD ^^ ~ :heart:
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:iconsweetflake3:
sweetflake3 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
That is sooo Zim.
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:icondreamlegend:
DreamLegend Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Student Artist
This is so relevant to my interests.
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hamsterlampshade Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011
...I need to get a nosebleed guard for this keyboard.
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TraverseTown93 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Love It!!! *O*
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ShadowDrift387 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011  Student Digital Artist
i loled at the last part
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xsavannahkay Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
Very nice. I adore the use of first person present tense and the way you cast Dib in second person. That was really amazing. :) And the broken thoughts/words you made the story formatted in...it's beautiful, really. :3
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InvaderAresX Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very good. Wait not just good amazing!!
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:iconxalexandrialocklikex:
Ur awesome!!!! this is great!!! whoot!!!!!!
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Gayliens Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
lmao! Its so amazing! Its verysexy and zims thoughts are perfect for the chrachter! Then the end was awsome!
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Invader-Leka Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
8D FLUFF!!!
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:iconchickiekillerdoll626:
love this so cute
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buttercupandbutch45 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010
I LUV IT
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SgtWolfie13 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2009
It reminds me how sweet he was to me... *starts blushing*
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:iconsgtwolfie13:
SgtWolfie13 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2009
Ah,crap I messed up on the last comment what I mean was it reminds me how sweet my boyfriend was to me...
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zalladane-icefire Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2009
so innocent so cute must not glomp :O_o: ...too late
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KattUcia Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2009
This is love ^^
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MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
<---- he agree XDDDDDDDDDDD
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:iconkattucia:
KattUcia Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
XD

You should most def do more fanfics. Your stuff is epic love. ^^
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:iconmklier:
MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
I'm making one now ^^
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:iconkattucia:
KattUcia Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
:dance: YAY! I'll beta for you if you wish! ^^
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:iconmklier:
MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
ah, thank you but I just asked some weeks ago to :iconreikey: be my beta XD

Maybe in another future fic :3
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:iconkattucia:
KattUcia Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
Well, shucks.

Yes, maybe in the future. :Meow:
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TikiGirl890 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2009
awwwwwwwwwwwww xDDDDD adorei o final xDDDD
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IZStatEofPaniC Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
Your first fic? O.o
AMAZING! My first wasn't half this good..
you must read them alot, huh?

Well, your very good Lier-Neechan!
Keep at it!


ehhh.......? UWAH!
GOMEN NASAI! *bows head*

I adressed you as Nee-chan without first asking your permission.. how horrible of me..
Please forgive me!

I adress all my good friends as ____-Neechan..
but you don't mind right? I mean..
we are friends... right?
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:iconmklier:
MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
XD
Yes, we are friends ^^
But I like to call my otaku friends just "chan" XD
so.... IZ-chan? XP

Well, anyway, this fic is just my first ZADR fic
2 years ago I wrote a fic about Kurogane/Fai, from Tsubasa Reservoir Chronicle but I stoped 'cause of my college and stuff....
This fic is super famous, a lots of people beg to me to keep going with it, but just brazilian yaoi fans :P
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IZStatEofPaniC Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
I'm not brazilian and i think you should continue it.
Only if you get some real inspiration to do so, though.
I hate it when authors feel real rushed and then their stories end up sucking!
Not that yours would.. ^^;
I'm just saying people who hurry are less likely to have amazing/epic/good fics or stories. :nod:

Wait, whos IZ-chan? :shakefish:
I am totally confused..

You?
If so, than what am i? :?
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:iconmklier:
MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Your name on DA is IZStatEofPaniC, right? so I cut the name and called you just IZ-chan XDDD

Yeah, I know the end is too quickly... but if I went too far they would have sex XDDD
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IZStatEofPaniC Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
xD

Zim smex.. UWAH!!

YAY!
I have a nickname!! =P
So i can still call you Lier-chan right?
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:iconmklier:
MKLier Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
yus, you can call me like that ^^
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:iconizstateofpanic:
IZStatEofPaniC Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009
ok... Lier-chan. =P
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Rapsody101 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
dang it, i loved the whole thing! it was amazing! you are amazing! i felt like i was the one this was happening to. -devious grins-
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emogaaragirl Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
wow awesome XD
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AcidCandyDrops Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
LOL, loved the ending
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hineko1123 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
XD love the end "Fuck it, I want you." XD that was great.
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reikey Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
Very good!!
Can't wait for the big one!^w^~:heart:
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HettyBobcat Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Yeah, that is VERY good. :D
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sessyandozzylover Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
...!

ILOVETHIS


<3
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karatekat24 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Student Artist
so dramatic, very nice =D
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